Once in a dream (for once I dreamed of you)
the universe colluded in an open field
we stood together like spiritual family –
sporting with ease the courting
cosmos in full view
Once in a dream (I woke up next to you)
I felt the pause of thirsty souls
who never in a lifetime find the true love
at length beneath the stars we
create narratives of time ran golden
and glory worn like beloved clothes
i felt your long black hair
for my spirit to expand in paradise
Once in a dream (for dreaming was with you)
i struck the bells wantonly, tinkle tinkle well
to golden lamps and oranges
while foremost we sparkled on the brink
of love at one with nature
in hours that cannot come again
but continue like the ding dong deep.
Photo Courtesy: http://www.deviantart.com/art/Blue-bells-269714352
I love the parenthetical remarks. They add an interesting rhythm to the poem. The whole thing is like a song.
yes I do italics or parenthetical stuff or the – mark, whatever I can think of to get some relief (too much writing makes one bored to read one’s own consciousness)
Flows elegantly.
Thanks Chess
Lovely. I like the repetition – once in a dream – and the line – the universe colluded… wonderful.
Thank you Steph, I really tried hard to break into a new style in this one and for me it was pivotal moment of a new direction of my verse…
I really enjoyed stanza 3; in fact, I enjoy all your work, but you know that. Have a great day/night.
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This is such an incredibly lyrical poem, I can almost hear faint music as I read down the page.